Han Kunyang
21 Lower Kent Ridge Road
Singapore 119077
(+65)9…
a0002882@nus.edu.sg
10th September 2012
Graduate Recruitment
ICAP
10 Marina Boulevard #21-01
Marina Bay Financial Tower 2
Singapore 018983
Dear Sir/Madam,
ICAP
Internship Programme
I am enclosing
my resume in response to your advertisement for the above internship programme
which appeared on National University of Singapore’s eJobCentre website on 7th
September 2012.
I am currently
an undergraduate in the National University of Singapore, studying for a Bachelor
of Science, with Major in Quantitative Finance. Besides my core courses, I have
taken a diverse range of electives that have honed my ability to listen,
comprehend and compose coherent arguments, and to be comfortable communicating
in a professional environment.
Before my enrollment into university, I worked part-time as a real estate telemarketer and as a nightclub waiter. My diverse job experience in the service sector had allowed me to pick up many skills that are useful and relevant for an internship at ICAP. These stints trained my ability to multi-task in a fast-paced job environment, to maintain a calm professionalism, and to work unsupervised even under immense pressure.
Before my enrollment into university, I worked part-time as a real estate telemarketer and as a nightclub waiter. My diverse job experience in the service sector had allowed me to pick up many skills that are useful and relevant for an internship at ICAP. These stints trained my ability to multi-task in a fast-paced job environment, to maintain a calm professionalism, and to work unsupervised even under immense pressure.
During my
enrolment in university, I was heavily involved in organizing and facilitating co-curricular
activities such as an overseas community service project and freshman
orientation projects. These experiences trained my communication skills
and sense of teamwork. Therefore, I am comfortable around foreign environments,
I can interact well with strangers and colleagues, and I am a perceptive,
motivated team player.
I have an objective-oriented work personality, and I have a
strong, personal, desire to continuously explore, improve and learn. I am
interested in finance and I have a particularly keen interest for the workings
in your Research division. An internship with ICAP would be an amazing opportunity
for me, and I hope to learn by observing and contributing to the company’s
operations.
I hope you
will look favourably at my application. I look forward to hearing from you.
Yours
sincerely,
Han Kunyang
Hey Han,
ReplyDeleteThis was a nice cover letter where you sold yourself pretty well. But I thought that you could have sold yourself better. You focussed a lot on your soft skills such as being a good team player, an effective communicator and a keen learner. These are wonderful qualities to have. However, if I receive 10 other applications which say the same, I fear there was not much that would make you stand out. So I thought that you should have spoken more about a particular instance where your team spirit came to the fore or an instance when your calm mind helped. I would have also liked to see a few technical and academic stuff that you learnt from your real estate internship. This is important because when you market for yourself, you need to brag about something you are an expert at. You had mentioned about being an active member in several orientation programmes etc. You would have had several great experiences for sure and had you elaborated on them, it could have shown you as a very influential character and a good leader too. These could make you stand out. Hence, I think that this cover letter was pretty good but it was not bang on target. I am sure you have all the essentials to be there and I hope you do improve on this :)
Cheers,
Chandra
Hi Han,
ReplyDeleteThis is a good cover letter. You have shown how some of your experience that to me appears unrelated to finance into something that is more attractive to employer. I agree with Chandra though you lack specific qualification for the job that you are applying for that makes you stand out. Since this is internship, this may not result in much problem, but you can perhaps begin join competition or activities more related to your course and degree.
For orientation program, CCA and external stuff, you also need to be specific. What CCA? What orientation program? What exactly do you there and how does it help you to develop the skills? How does the skill may help you contribute to the organization?
I know this may sound like too much hassle considering it is just an internship, however having good internship will help you to stand out for your job application letter.
All the best!
Hi Bro,
ReplyDeleteThis is quite a good cover letter! Besides stating your own major, you have identified a range of skills and qualities you have learnt from the other electives you took that show that you are special in your own way compared to the other QF students. Also, your diverse job experiences have shown that you can work professionally in different environment. There are more than these good points that i have mentioned. However, i think your cover letter would be even better if you relate how the skills and knowledge you have developed can be applicable in working at the organization during internship.
Overall, you did a great job! I would take you in for internship if i am the part of management of the organization!
Cheers,
Yong Sheng